Sabtu, 16 Mei 2009

writing 3

My Unforgettable Moment


Moment sit in class 2 Senior High School.I had planing go to picnic to Jatim Park at the time of holiday go to school with all my best friend that is Kara, Dian, and Yulia. Finally school holiday that we wait arrive, but of my Father will not give me permission have the day off to Jatim Park, because me and my friend no one have had SIM A become too dangerous to bring car go out town, so that I abled to bring a car. So, I perforce to lie and say that we will go to look on cinema.

At that moment my father finally permit me to go with my best friend ,but he said to me do not come home at night. Than we go to Jatim Park. On the way go to Jatim Park there is no hindrance, we finally arrived in our destination place. The day have started its moment evening us return to house before night arrive, so that father do not distrust if me have our lieing. And ready to go to car to return home.

On the way go home, I thought I do not predict ugly something that earn befall me. But on the way go home, I ride car high-speedly so that get home not too night. So that, something ugly matter befall car me, which we ride to experience of accident of that high-speed effect so that punch a just tree. Lucky of us all not experience of broken my hurt, there are big contusion at my chest effect of just security. If belt pressure I do not wear that belt, I have been thrown to dead and next glass.


But since that accident make me conscious lie to Parent make that occurrence bad, and I take a miracle from accident of it, will make study and till now I have never forget that accident.

10 komentar:

  1. I think your pargraph is great...

    but what is the meaning of "lieing"
    in sentence
    "so that father do not distrust if me have our lieing.

    BalasHapus
  2. your paragraph have little mistakes in some sentences,.

    your grammar is enough,..

    elok 120810486G

    BalasHapus
  3. i think your paragraph is good enough but there are some mistakes word that you use. like word than, lieing, and etc.

    but is ok, you can do better on the next project.

    BalasHapus
  4. first of all,
    thank you for your comment in my blog .

    i thik your paragraph is good .
    same with the others i dont know what is the meaning of "lieing" ?

    but it's ok so far your paragraph is good enough .

    ( Ranti P. Nastiti 120810190G)

    BalasHapus
  5. Hi, pinks!!
    Thanks for comment my blog..

    Hmm.. I think your paragraph is quiet good,but unfortunately there are many mistakes of uses grammar. I think you should write more.


    Pratiwi Ramandita 120810487G

    BalasHapus
  6. Rudinal.........Ithink Your PAragrph Is Good...
    Only a litle mistakes in Your Writng,,,,,
    REply my Coments Ukai

    BalasHapus
  7. Hi....pinkzz,,

    i think your paragraph is good enough,,,

    but there are some mistake on your writing,,in grammar,tenses, and vocab.....

    but,, so far your writing is good,,,u tried to make a good paragraph,,and it's understand to read....

    that's all my comment,,
    thank's
    :)

    BalasHapus
  8. Komentar ini telah dihapus oleh pengarang.

    BalasHapus
  9. hy pinkzz. .
    i think your paragraph is good enough. .


    there are some word which its not true, more accurate okey. . .

    . . . . .Rico. . . . .

    BalasHapus
  10. be honest,... this post need more attentions about your "Linggis" :p

    umm... Am I correct if I said, "this blog just for fun or just for exam..."? :p

    I'm looking forward 4your next updates... ;-)
    kep posting! your fans out there are waiting for your talents...

    BalasHapus